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July- 4- 2024

I Couldn't Talk About it, So I Wrote a Poem Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Silent One

~ PLACED FIRST~

A seed of love rests dormant in my heart. Unable to get it sprout on fertile grounds, It still lies thick and hard like a dried nut. Can I hope, a cool shower of rain will soak it, Causing it to sprout, strike roots and grow into a plant? Now I am crushed under the marauding wheels, Of a nameless pain, I can’t articulate. Though I have bandaged my hurt long ago, It peeps its head breaking the wrap, Causing the wound to bleed from time to time, And I get plunged into an unnamed pain. No eyes are there to gaze on my despair, But like a heavy log, it always burdens my heart, And mournful sobs come out from me. Just like the soggy surroundings, Now, as a dull mist hangs in the air, A sallow gloom invades me, As an unwelcome odd- time intruder. Though it had rained some time ago, Dark clouds gather once more in the sky, As if another shower could be expected. Leaves still shed drops of tears And time moves on at snail’s pace. The happy world I once fashioned around me, Has collapsed and memories call from the past. His words- “Now that our pathways sever here, Let us part’’- fell in my ears like a loud thud. It was the greatest blow I ever received. Now upon life’s highway, desolate I walk. I am crushed under the marauding wheels, Of a nameless pain, I can’t articulate. Silence burns inside and thoughts bleed in silence. In the dank confines of my soul, This unuttered pain seeks redemption. As I cannot open up my heart to any one, Here I am, penning this poem, Still aching, and my mind cracked and shattered.

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Crystol Woods

Date: 7/23/2024 9:22:00 AM

You write so beautifully, your expressions connect others with your experiences and your one of those writers who we can relate to and for those of us who can't express as well, we do so vicariously through you. Thank you for that and for this poem! Xo

Silent One

Date: 7/22/2024 11:34:00 AM

You describe a lot of pain here, without revealing what pain it is, so I guess you could not write that in your poem either.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..

Valsa George
Date: 7/22/2024 10:05:00 PM

Thanks a lot dear Silent One for placing my poem in the top list. I feel so delighted.

Tonye George

Date: 7/7/2024 7:59:00 AM

What a lovely piece Dear Valsa. I'm reading through and I ask myself. Does the pain all go away? They don't. Scars are a reminder that wounds can still bleed. And I always say, if the scar remains, the hurt does. You have written this so beautifully. "Of a nameless pain, I can’t articulate. Though I have bandaged my hurt long ago, It peeps its head breaking the wrap, Causing the wound to bleed from time to time." Great one V.

Yann Rolland

Date: 7/6/2024 2:23:00 AM

this is beautifully written , pains never vanish, your poem deserve great attention and thought, enjoyed yann

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/5/2024 3:19:00 PM

Dear Valsa, My apologies if I failed to notice your amazing writing. I just returned from a month-long journey and will be leaving again shortly. But when I read this first thing in the afternoon, it seemed like I was carried away on an incredible trip through the course of human experience. You skillfully delved into the many layers of suffering and yearning, thus it was profound. Putting these feelings into words is a challenge for many of us. The latent love's ability to portray the common human experience of holding on to hope in the face of adversity was striking. If everyone could feel the genuine connectivity of everything, I think we'd all be drastically happy.

Valsa George
Date: 7/5/2024 8:40:00 PM

After a long journey I know how difficult it is to get back settled. So you needn't apologize. I understand that again you are planning another journey. Wish you all the Best and thanks a lot for your uplifting comment.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 7/5/2024 6:49:00 AM

Dear Valsa, When I woke this morning and read this, I suddenly felt I was on a poetic exploration of the human condition. It certainly was deep as you wonderfully went into the intricate layers of pain and longing. We often struggle to articulate these emotions. One thing that stood out was the dormant seed of love and how it beautifully captured the universal experience of hope amidst despair. I believe we would be much happier if we all experienced the true interconnectedness of all things. I have to applaud you for your willingness to confront and express such deep raw, but honest emotions. It is not just brave, but also a gift to those who read your words that offer peace and understanding to others who may be silently carrying similar burdens.– Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Valsa George
Date: 7/5/2024 8:35:00 PM

Hi Daniel, your comments are so sincere probing into the depth of emotions expressed. They are so analytical and a pleasure to read. But I must admit that the pain and longing expressed in my poem is not sincere and the poem is purely fictional written for the contest. Thank you so much for your wonderful words of appreciation, dear friend.

Ink Empress

Date: 7/4/2024 1:14:00 PM

I understand and can feel the melancholy flowing through your words in such a seamless manner as always. Your words always are so easy to read and feel as you weave words in a way that touches the soul of the reader. I really love the descriptive nature of your lines, how youv also painted an ambience with vivid imagery to depict these emotions. And i love the lines “Leaves still shed drops of tears And time moves on at snail’s pace.” That should be quoted and framed as it gives also a very philosophic touch!!! I think silent one will like this! I love it definitely: best wishes

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/3/2024 11:32:00 PM

farewells are hard to fathom and your poem expressed the pain in a most gritty yet impeccable wordplay...great job, valsa!