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2/27/2013 8:06:52 PM
Blood Get Weaker	Spelling mistakes immediately spoil this work, not sure what 'dos grouch' is suppose to mean, 'tear ducks', should be tear ducts. Spacings are missing between words which does not help. The layout is very scattered, three four line stanzas and then a huge block, 'Not once, not twice should be on a single line. The story I get, but the end is just wishful thinking, consider how much better it would be if you attacked his ego. Regards Richard
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2/27/2013 8:06:52 PM

Spelling mistakes immediately spoil this work, not sure what 'dos grouch' is suppose to mean, 'tear ducks', should be tear ducts. Spacings are missing between words which does not help. The layout is very scattered, three four line stanzas and then a huge block, 'Not once, not twice should be on a single line. The story I get, but the end is just wishful thinking, consider how much better it would be if you attacked his ego. Regards Richard

pages: 1