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Corinne
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5/7/2010 10:01:53 AM
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5/7/2010 10:03:06 AM
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Beach Combing
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Made me smile. I like the rhymes, the humor. Really nothing to nitpick here.
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5/7/2010 10:07:09 AM
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The Inner Spy
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Hi Charlotte
You have superfluous words that break up the meter. You started out well with the first verse, but then words such as "but" and "yet" and even "the"are not needed in places, and removing them will make the poem flow better.
Also watch spelling - truly, deceit.
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