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1/30/2012 5:17:27 AM
CRUSH:	Normal 0 false false false MicrosoftInternetExplorer4 st1\:{behavior:url(#ieooui) } / Style Definitions */ table.MsoNormalTable {mso-style-name:"Table Normal"; mso-tstyle-rowband-size:0; mso-tstyle-colband-size:0; mso-style-noshow:yes; mso-style-parent:""; mso-padding-alt:0in 5.4pt 0in 5.4pt; mso-para-margin:0in; mso-para-margin-bottom:.0001pt; mso-pagination:widow-orphan; font-size:10.0pt; font-family:"Times New Roman"; mso-ansi-language:#0400; mso-fareast-language:#0400; mso-bidi-language:#0400;}hello, this is one of my favourite poems, and being new to this forum and poetry group i would like to recieve feedback. any type of feedback is highly acceptable and will be constructively received. thank you. CRUSH The day i first met her She moved along like a timed slide show With grace and chaste in her stride Swinging her hips like a desert Carmel And stepping on the ground like it hurts. That’s when i first saw her Meeting her was a dream come true, Speaking to her was like melting the snow. Her voice like the ocean singing low With no turbulent waves to alter the flow. That’s when i first met her. Touching her was like food to a pauper Her skin smooth like a kwashiorkor patient Her body soft like sheep wool That’s when i first touched her. Holding her in my arms, Being with her all my life ...was never imagined For it never happened
1/30/2012 7:48:25 AM
CRUSH:	thanks...means alot.
8/23/2014 8:36:06 AM
BEYOND THE BRAIN	Secretly treading on the wrong path I'm afraid of my of my own shadow Chasing me down the lane Disappointed by my own self and reaking of fear within Even my breath stinks of fear The unknown and the future all unclear You don't who trust and who to blame You are just there. Louis muhereza
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