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9/11/2023 6:58:17 AM
Romina Yaghubi
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And you don't know how much it hurts
The way I feel every single piece of my heart
Crushing under the weight of your love
And I don't know what I'm supposed to do
When the only thing I know is run
I run run run down a road
Where the sun goes down
And they kiss goodnight
You're tangled in me
They way those lovers are
But we're not lovers
And you're not here
So why don't you just let me go
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9/16/2023 9:43:41 AM
Ray Zottola
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rominayaghubi wrote:
And you don't know how much it hurts
The way I feel every single piece of my heart
Crushing under the weight of your love
And I don't know what I'm supposed to do
When the only thing I know is run
I run run run down a road
Where the sun goes down
And they kiss goodnight
You're tangled in me
They way those lovers are
But we're not lovers
And you're not here
So why don't you just let me go
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9/16/2023 9:47:46 AM
Ray Zottola
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A past life dream id say.. I had them when young. Didn't recognize until later that the tiger chasing me was real, not my imagination as I was too young to create this scenario.
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