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6/7/2023 12:43:56 PM Romina Yaghubi Posts: 7	Hi this is a poem I wrote. I want to hear your thoughts on it and keep in mind that I'm not a native English speaker. Thanks. I couldn't hear a word of what he's got to say no more As there was this war coming about in my head Soldiers against soldiers Men against men Tearing each other apart Eating each other's hearts I only can define a tiny bit of it For there was no war in the history To be defined by the human race, Humane enough to be borne by people's hearts And this one was no exception I might have to admit to the darkness of my soul The wounds of my own But wounds are nothing to be created by the wounded The wounded is just a prey for a predator's words As I was to him As I am to anyone The pitfall which I've been trapped in Is the story of my life edited by rominayaghubi on 6/7/2023
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6/7/2023 7:46:57 PM Bob Atkinson Posts: 294	Thank you romina for showing me there are honest people out there. Have written many many anti-war poems, seems people just don't get it. Arguments about who's going to win are to me insincere barbarity. Arguments on the best way stop war cold are all I really want to hear.
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6/8/2023 5:03:26 AM Romina Yaghubi Posts: 7	Hi. Thank you very much. I totally agree with you.
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7/13/2023 1:24:32 PM lelio trevisani Posts: 3	Thank you romina for showing me there are honest people out there.
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