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12/19/2022 8:19:44 PM
Ms Affection
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Feedback would be great on this sonnet. Just trying to get better at writing AND capturing the reader.
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“Who are you?”, I asked one day
Her puzzled look blew my mind
Within herself she was trying to find
But had no idea to my dismay
Despite the confidence she tried to display
The years of pretense she couldn’t unbind
Long lost time, no rewind
“Who am I”?, the lines were grey
“Ahhhaa moment”, it came to her
Realizing, she had to step away
From deception that caused her identity to blur
Freedom within, she would no longer stray
To a place that masked the real her
True found self, here to stay
edited by Affection on 12/19/2022
edited by Affection on 12/19/2022
edited by Affection on 12/19/2022
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