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12/19/2022 4:56:19 AM Di11y Da11y Posts: 17	Written as a flow of consciousness but with enough good bits that could be made into something? Which path should this brain dump take? Currently disconnected and heavy editting required. Could be presented in other poetic styles which I haven't yet learnt (or heard of). I particularly like the line about unpicking and getting tangled. Just the right level of weird That's the aim Complex but not unfathomable Difficult But worth it I don't predict I'll be easy going any time soon "It's been great knowing you" is not the line associated with me "It's been interesting" maybe The aim is to like myself Tricky business that I wonder how many people master it? It feels like everyone sails triumphantly over the seas making merry conversations and not being weird I'm stuck with weird and don't want to be in their boat, although I wish I wanted to be Organised days, acceptable fun, neat, planned, just imagine Right now I could be preparing tea in advance but I'm in bed with the dog lay on my feet, he has the pillow too - I can't possibly make tea when the bed now smells of dog, this and other avoidable mini dramas stopping my success Happy dog days, accomplishment I need a different tick list On it I'll write: Be weird Be lenient with the dogs rules Be spontaneous about tea Be laid back (as literal as required) about housework I can already tick off eating chocolate for breakfast Tomorrow can have a tick list With order and routine That counts the minutes And uses them wisely Today my energy is spent Long before I rose I'll rest in several locations today To summon the energy for tomorrow I'm not sure if unpicking the weird Gets you tangled in the stitches? Patching the weird Leaves you partially hidden Chopping away the weird Results in holes Too much weird Leads to combustion and explosion How do I get to just the right amount? Perfectly editted this could be a poignant poem Perfectly editted I could be neat Perfect edit seeking aim Trouble is, it drives you mad Hello square one
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1/1/2023 5:20:51 AM Irene Hammer-McLaughlin Posts: 1	What if you tried to take yourself out of it? For example, "I'm not sure if unpicking the weird Gets you tangled in the stitches?" could be changed to, "Does unpicking the weird tangle the stitches?" If the poem sounds less confessional, perhaps it could become more universal. Good luck to you!
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