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3/9/2022 4:45:02 PM
Theory Alexander Posts: 2
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It's kinda a Pantoum but I added an extra line
Love is confusing. Let me explain The experience is lacking and It only brings pain
Let me explain The idea sounds amazing but really It only brings pain and Confusion
The idea sounds amazing but really It's hard, the Confusion Leaves everybody on their guard
It's hard The experience is lacking and Leaves everybody on their guard So in conclusion, Love is confusing.
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3/10/2022 8:14:55 PM
Bob Atkinson Posts: 294
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15 unforced errors out of 17 lines?
Theme's weak. Teaching moment? No
Love IS confusing. Let me explain THE experience IS lacking and IT only brings pain
Let me explain THE idea sounds amazing but really IT only brings pain and Confusion
THE idea sounds amazing but really IT’S hard, THE Confusion Leaves everybody on their guard
IT’S hard THE experience IS lacking and Leaves everybody on their guard So inconclusion, Love IS confusing.
****** Are freshman comp teachers on strike?
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3/11/2022 7:31:18 PM
Theory Alexander Posts: 2
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While I appreciate the feedback and understand that this is a high-critique forum, perhaps the best way prodive helpful, constructive criticism is to not insult people and actually provide advice. I also understand that this is not exactly a Pantoum. I simply find the format of Pantoums an interesting challenge, even if I don't follow all the rules.
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3/12/2022 3:04:48 PM
Bob Atkinson Posts: 294
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Entity,
Didn't mean it as an insult apologize if you took it that way.
Took it as a training moment more for others than you.
Speaking of which, best way to learn the craft is NOT being
critical of your own stuff, or care what others think
BEST way is: write, write, write, write
write, write.
Being self critical is like a door stop to creative writing.
Spent my first 4 hours writing poetry creating blank page.
Decided to write 100 poems without creating anything of value.
No worries on those hundred for quality, thought would toss them
when done. I'm up to 1500 poems published on line, some good,
some (most?) very rotten, but I don't judge them or care that others
do judge them. I JUST WRITE MORE. With the intent of someday
in the future writing something useful.
Web search, but don't use google (they're working on it): Poetry Critic
Regards,
Bob
p.s. read Baudelaire's Les Fleur Du Mal
great for understanding how powerful "theme" is in writing poetry.
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10/22/2022 12:21:35 PM
EOTrees Myles Posts: 14
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I get it but please, take your time and do some editing with taking your time, be patient.
-- E.O.-Tree"s Myles
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