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10/27/2021 10:07:22 AM
Ms Affection Posts: 9
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Thankful Enjoying the noise Ongoing laughter and joy Standing in his place Dad says a heartfelt prayer Thankful his children are home edited by Affection on 10/27/2021
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3/19/2022 1:06:15 PM
Dave Collins Posts: 13
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Yr syllable count is good. My only suggestion would be to substitute the word "says" for "sighs" a heartfelt prayer. There's good emotion in it. Nice job.
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