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10/13/2020 12:52:46 AM
Peter Dougal Posts: 6
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Slowly a visage slips into view An old man’s face; who are you? A brother, an uncle, maybe a dad Always looking morose and sad Watery eyes with no sign of hope Struggling on, just trying to cope Haggard and drawn, looks even thinner Ah dang it! Gotta get rid of this mirror! edited by Dougal on 10/13/2020
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12/27/2020 3:51:00 PM
Jack Webster Posts: 255
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4/21/2021 12:26:36 PM
Matthew Cole Posts: 1
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Great imagery and very descriptive! I love the ending!
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4/25/2021 11:28:10 PM
Eduardo Richardson Posts: 65
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I really liked this verse, both with the factual and semantic content, and the form that you gave it. For me lately, the form in art and creativity, including in writing poetry or prose, is more important than meaning. That is why I have now started experimenting with the shape of my texts.
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7/12/2021 6:43:16 AM
Brian Roberts Posts: 3
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I truly savored the verse and flow of your poem, and the universality of it.
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12/4/2022 8:50:55 AM
freeland browning Posts: 2
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Most excellent. Good timing , rhyme and message. It's got it all.
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12/13/2022 11:36:27 PM
Ellen Gwaltney Bales Posts: 5
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I love your poem. It reminds me of some of mine. Until I read "The Old Man" I wasn't sure if I was on the right track. You give me hope!
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11/5/2023 2:38:29 AM
Joshua Claridge Posts: 1
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Love it.
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