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5/4/2020 12:31:10 PM
Staus Eef
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farewell i bid the boundless sea
its wordless depths stare back at me
well a-day! i am mournful as can be
for oceans too care not for me.
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5/5/2020 10:39:13 PM
Jack Webster
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“Farewell,” I bid thee, Boundless Sea.
It’s wordless depths stare back at me,
well a-day! I am mournful as can be,
for the oceans, too, care not for me.
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Short; sweet; well versed. Perfect length for the topic. Reminds me of Dickinson.
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5/28/2020 4:21:21 PM
William Jenkins
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Short and to the point, however I would not say simple! (I mean this in a good way). I like the forlorn meaning, rather bittersweet feeling I get from these few powerful lines.
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