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10/27/2011 8:01:00 PM

Sitting on the porch
listening to a robin
singing from afar
washed in
winter starlight
brushed by barren boughs
september leaves painted in
the blush afterglow
can you hear the
flowers laughing?
i could sit for hours
chatting with the trees about
how the stars once ruled
a falling snowstar:
another, then another--
I wish for flowers
--the trees turn to black
--no swallowsong to hear
cloudkisses on a
Tulip-freckled cheek
petals smear the grass
watching the clouds turn
from pearl white to sullen black
cherry blossoms smile
mid-day: I spot a
rainbow smiling from afar--
damn, I need that gold!
sleepy meadow. . .
a gentle breeze drops
dandelion snow
dew pearls strewn across
a field of verdant spring grass,
glinting at sunrise
tumbleweeds looking
for a shady place to rest
a lone mesquite brush
crisp leaves rustling in
the breeze down a twilit road--
summer's requiem
stars and flowers paint
the sky with their blood
in twilight warfare
flock calls echo from
afar searching for someone
to tell knock knock jokes
in the miasma
of ash, I see a face--
our mother
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12/21/2011 5:25:40 PM

Allen Nuytens
Posts: 7
I really love this collection you have here ^_^ I was never any good at haikus but, it's an art you seem to master. Good work. ^_^
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