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1/26/2020 5:35:22 PM
Derek Vallandingham
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ALCOHOL
Coming in bottle's or cans.
The center of all my plans.
Ran to you in time's of tense.
Giving so much confidence.
Doesn't matter where you are.
Easily found in a bar.
By my side while shooting pool.
Thinking I appeared so cool.
Since Then haven't put you down.
With me your always around.
Now doing stuff that I hate
With this alcoholic trait.
Turned into someone I'm not.
Look at the trouble you brought.
You & me's stuck tog.ether.
Now a loser forever
Bottom of bottle you'll find
A hopeless soul that is mine
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1/27/2020 2:15:22 PM
Jack Webster
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Good beginning. Let it grow some more.
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