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3/27/2019 12:41:34 PM Jack Webster Posts: 255	The soup has spilled boiling hot into my lap. Howl upon howl cools nothing. I must go and leave an empty bowl where it lies on the floor. edited by superlativedeleted on 3/27/2019
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4/3/2019 11:20:01 PM Quoth TheRaven Posts: 3	Jack, I remember reading this and other honest critiques of yours. This isn't an epitaph An epitaph would be like: They buried her by the train, still waiting for her father. I hope I have something worthy of your honest opinion someday. -Richard -- QuothTheRaven
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4/15/2019 12:11:35 PM Bob Atkinson Posts: 294	Jack’s gone to a higher place his time spent here not wasted seems we, of simple mind set will miss his practiced phrases no more has our friend of note time for us heathen folks his mind got set for better things while we wallow in our words for nothing makes for better smiles than those efforts people make to help their fellow bumpkins carve out much better phrases ***** p { margin-bottom: 0.1in; line-height: 120%; }
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4/15/2019 12:16:16 PM James Fitz-Gerald Posts: 2	Bob, I really liked the poem. Really down to earth. Thank you. no more has our friend of note time for us heathen folks his mind got set for better things while we wallow in our words for nothing makes for better smiles than those efforts people make to help their fellow bumpkins carve out much better phrases ***** p { margin-bottom: 0.1in; line-height: 120%; }
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