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2/2/2019 3:26:58 PM

levi johnson
Posts: 10

Our Lady the Queen of Angels
Fraction departed years ago
Relinquishing all Godly angles

Tarnished by social implosion
Sardined by piranha crowds
Reshapes ambition’s motion

A passage of locust like swarms
Hindering any sense of compass
A challenge of temper's storms

Smog and sulfate life robust
Breathe and choke and seethe
A brown metal blanket of dust

Vice and gangs playground
Beware the senseless tomb
Compromised life if found

Yet, armies of seekers still arrive
The fiscally desperate and fallen
Need tooth and claw to survive

Struggle and bleed to the end
Second and third chance society
Designed for faults of frantic trends

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