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1/31/2019 9:37:05 AM

Lemayian Leksat
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FIRST DATE

I remember our first date
I did everything not to become late
I wanted to create an impression, an expression of love.

This was the first date, on my calendar of true love
Love like no other before, and I've had none like it there after
An angel so beautiful, taking steps so careful
And I wanted to create an impression, an expression of love.

She walked to me with a bright smile so divine
I was carried away, away above cloud nine
A million questions seemed answered
And all the doubts in me seemed cleared
She is the one, I concluded
As I wanted to create an impression, an expression of love.

We said so much without talking
Hand in hand we kept walking
Stealing glances at each other
And before too long, my heart was stolen
The beautiful bright eyes hang so humbly,
Occasioned by a contagious smile so sweet
I almost hit my foot on a tile, admiring her sweet lips
I listened to honey drip from her mouth,
Listening to her sweet words using my heart
To create an impression, an expression of love.

Again, I looked at her teary eyes and asked
' Why are you crying? '
In turn she asked me
' And why are you crying? '
To create an impression, an expression of love.

Because I found you,
Angels stay in heaven but I'm talking to one right now
This is heaven on earth because of you:
You bring meaning to my life
My true definition of love
You are worth more than the most beautiful of the roses
One in a million
You are the one my heart desires
The apple of my eye
You are my dream come true
The girl of my wildest dreams
I love you whole heart mind body and soul my queen
I answered without thinking to create an impression, an expression of love.

I felt tear drops on my chest, as we knelt down in a nest
An emotion so deep, brought a decision so divine
No more words to create our beautiful world
And begin the beginning of wonderful journey full of sweet memories
But an embrace was enough to create an impression, an expression of love.

Copyright © Lemayian Leksat | Year Posted 2018

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