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5/16/2018 7:48:04 AM Jenefer Venezia Posts: 3	~Lilacs~ I love my lilacs A sign of life that blooms A tear to my eye, oh their fragrance Cone-shaped petals of lavender and white They forever grow in my heart. I pick and pick at them until they grow so high I can’t make contact They stop growing I can’t reach or Arrange them into beautiful bouquets or Enjoy their sweet scent. Oh, but I love my lilacs. I now enjoy them from afar. I can no longer display them. If you stand real still and close your eyes you can catch their perfume When the wind blows north Their beauty barely within reach I will always love them. I have learned With proper pruning My lilacs would still be in reach, Their beauty for all to see Their fragrance for all to enjoy Their magnificence filling my world. Dandelions don’t tell no lies. Lilacs do. edited by Jenefer L Venezia on 5/17/2018
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5/16/2018 10:48:04 AM Constance La France Posts: 21	A very pretty poem... just to let you know there is a small typo on the first line of the second verse, you missed a space
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5/17/2018 8:54:40 PM Jenefer Venezia Posts: 3	constance_ wrote: A very pretty poem... just to let you know there is a small typo on the first line of the second verse, you missed a space
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5/17/2018 8:55:23 PM Jenefer Venezia Posts: 3	Thank you. I went in and fixed it!
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