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9/28/2017 1:06:40 AM

Sanja Cokolic
Posts: 13

I just hit the Unicorn

fetishized lament
echoed
from colourfully besmeared winding sheet

devouring luminosity
become my pivotal infringement
vigorous luminosity

somethin' s wrong with her transcript
-they said, and put me behind iron pipes

my name dawned divested
and encapsulated in frame
of long time inhumed language

thus
soul
elastane woven
bends
every time words clash at those
indifferent barricades

this circle of life is fuc***
it cringes in parts it shouldn't

Danaans gift tried to conceal scenery
of birth given screenplay
they failed to excrement that light

clash became my attribution
yet they didn't let me to keep
any of that ordeal dust

they left me empty-handed

but emptiness brings happiness when filled
outage is divergent level of melancholy

undertone of this vanity named it pain
I call it a way of life
you got a thousand and one battle
war is mine

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