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7/13/2017 3:46:23 PM
Te Ue
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As spring leaps forward expectedly
Cardinals sing a familiar song;
Announcing birth of season’s new
Perched in trees where they belong.
Hyacinths blooming graciously
Expressing their blue sincerely;
Coloring fields that once were white
They only visit once a yearly.
Spots of snow melting slowly
Revealing peridot grass underneath.
Drenched sod cold and wet
Green is this unruly heath.
Cool winds caresses the skin
Signs of winter still remain
Even in these warming days
It's common to see light rain.
Children play rambunctiously
Exploring the fields in awe
Seeing colors that never were
They can't seem to process it all.
As spring leaps forward expectedly
With leaves so bold and green.
Lapis skies blue and bright
This spring, best yet foreseen.
edited by Theo1112 on 7/13/2017
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7/13/2017 3:49:40 PM
Te Ue
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I would really like some feedback on this.
Theo
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