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4/13/2017 3:16:24 PM
Lisa Costigan
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BROKEN WING
Looking back on my pastThe years have flown by so very fast.
Being with a boy who i thought was the 1Having a baby so very young.
Thats when my nightmares really started,But didn't want my little family parted
Trying hard to make this work,But how can i when he is such a jerk
He was acting more like a babyI was crying out for something to save me.
Battered bruised verbally abused Laying crying feeling used.
Till one day i finally snapped,I walked out that door didn't look back
Couldn't believe i had just dun it
Hes the fool and looks the Muppet
Im so much stronger than ever before
and life just got better from closing that door.
edited by costalot35 on 4/13/2017
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4/15/2017 1:09:23 AM
Doug Vinson
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Real-life hardness to it, Lisa.  I do think you need to work on the spelling and grammar.
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