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6/14/2016 9:28:44 PM aj kay Posts: 1	PLEASE critique away... I'm really desperately trying to find my poetic voice again.. which is literally what the poem is partly about. This is the first poem I've written in like 5 years. I did free verse because I literally dont remember any other type besides haiku and I need to at least start somewhere. I used to be pretty good for my age, won poetry contests and stuff. Open to all criticism. Broken Audio I haven’t written in a while I seem to have lost my voice I'm not sure where or when it left me Or where to find it I have a feeling its in different pieces Shards of echoes splattered inside old notepads pressed between the cinder blocks of 10th grade biology Humiliation is a powerful numbing agent Paired hand in hand with cheap liquor I can’t remember who I was angry at I wish my face belonged to my brain I wish my brain belonged to a body That wasn’t itching for eternal rest I wish my bones didn’t feel like shoes that don’t fit right Too small, but you pretend they will stretch Up until the point that the blisters can no longer be ignored. I wish I hadn’t stopped reading books I wish my parents watched sports, and smiled, and owned decorative pillows I think my voice was suffocated By boys who saw nothing but a mouth I can talk now, but I’m mute On autopilot, with closed captions written by you.
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7/21/2016 10:55:58 PM Tom Arnone Posts: 14	For someone who stopped writing, your, A POEM ABOUT WHY I STOPPED WRITING POEMS is not too shabby! Actually, it's very good. Keep writing! :-)
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8/16/2016 1:00:34 PM scott thirtyseven Posts: 13	Shards of echoes, and splattered... superb lines, in a good poem. Though you do seem to waver a bit from the title, no great loss, for you've penned a nice read.
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9/2/2016 10:07:41 AM Robert Warlov Posts: 9	Nothing wrong with your voice. Just busy the boys with toys other than your silence, ( make 'em carry your cinderblocks!), and respect the dragon juice. Other than that, If you call it a poem, I'll believe you. Your a poet. Do what poets do; Write 'till lightning strikes!
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