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6/5/2016 7:15:55 AM Don Kubicki Posts: 1	This is not a poem. It is YUCK to the max!!!!!
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6/5/2016 5:28:05 PM Bob Atkinson Posts: 294	Love you Don. Don't see your site coming up first on a google search for: poetry critic Regards, Bob
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6/7/2016 1:37:35 PM Graphite Drug Posts: 81	This work reads like confessional poetry. It seems a bit deep for public consumption. It also seems as though it could be about actors on a stage, making it better for public consumption. I like its lack of punctuation, but it is an unclear work relying on an obfuscated subject. I would try for something more decipherable.
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6/7/2016 9:54:28 PM Bob Atkinson Posts: 294	Thank you Graph for your in depth analysis. Sure, if one were to frequent stage plays they'd recognize the situation straight off. The one-woman play, written and performed by someone letting us in on their lover experiences would, and could if written well, embarrass an audience to tears. This is the situation I tried to relate. Read it over and over, (my objective) and you'll get the point. Regards, Bob
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6/20/2016 8:05:26 AM Mike Jones Posts: 8	Good work Bob.
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6/27/2016 5:52:00 PM Bob Atkinson Posts: 294	Thanks Mike
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