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4/11/2016 10:55:43 AM

Dorothy Yuan
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sweeps a chorus of autumn twigs.
Embarking in the early eve,
I steer a light craft.
Rising, the moon rotates,
along the mountain peaks.
Flowing, the waters follow the whirlingsky.
Are we on the Milky Way?
Or, roving in a grove of fine clouds.

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