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12/28/2015 10:30:25 PM
Gabe Shelly
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When she comes...
Hold yours close
For Hell froze over
and Heaven be a spaceless nothing
11/29/'15
edited by Gabe on 12/28/2015
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12/31/2015 4:14:31 AM
Terry Robinson
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Succinct. Portraying a myriad of imagery. Well done. However, I would 'be' for 'is', much more f a flow and adds to the drama. Only my suggestion
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