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12/11/2015 5:14:59 AM
Terry Robinson Posts: 49
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I am a dog of Caanan. Protector of Israels settlements, and scavenger of the deserts. Cowed in movement and strangled with inhuman voice, I feed upon the waste of the crowds that gather about your lingering soul
Traipsing around the anguish of the Golgotha crucified, I smell their vapours departing. Yet, each step around your fading ruin ignites a crucifixion within me. Impaling me to your cross.
I hang upon your sorrow like a broken scarecrow, and linger at your feet, hoping to be remembered in the land to come. But, all I see is a simple man, pained to
the end of his tether. Shedding tears that fall from pain filled eyes, as desperate for earthly release, as he is for heavenly deliverance. Tears that nourish the dirt where they fall and bless the heads of those who stand close
Loping between the legs of your faithful, I nip the ankles of your accusers, a rightful dispenser of their pennance. Final miracles demanded but no longer heard, the weak of faith tumble away like brittle leaves, blown by the frailest of winds.
Evoking akward glances that feed my empathy, and soul wrenching moments drained by your despair. And no longer cowed by man and his craven destructions, I sit at the foot of your cross, resolutely guarding your ascendency.
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1/5/2016 12:23:07 PM
Terry Robinson Posts: 49
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Michael_Spangle wrote:
A truly unique perspective. How often are those who TRULY see and understand ignored and regarded as contemptible by the masses of humanity. Both the Man on the cross, and His erstwhile guardian regarded as equals. Perhaps, in the best sense of the word, they truly are. Thanks Michael Well summed up
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2/5/2016 9:02:36 PM
Helen Murray Posts: 3
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trobbo44 wrote:
I am a dog of Caanan. Protector of Israels settlements, and scavenger of the deserts. Cowed in movement and strangled with inhuman voice, I feed upon the waste of the crowds that gather about your lingering soul
Traipsing around the anguish of the Golgotha crucified, I smell their vapours departing. Yet, each step around your fading ruin ignites a crucifixion within me. Impaling me to your cross.
I hang upon your sorrow like a broken scarecrow, and linger at your feet, hoping to be remembered in the land to come. But, all I see is a simple man, pained to
the end of his tether. Shedding tears that fall from pain filled eyes, as desperate for earthly release, as he is for heavenly deliverance. Tears that nourish the dirt where they fall and bless the heads of those who stand close
Loping between the legs of your faithful, I nip the ankles of your accusers, a rightful dispenser of their pennance. Final miracles demanded but no longer heard, the weak of faith tumble away like brittle leaves, blown by the frailest of winds.
Evoking akward glances that feed my empathy, and soul wrenching moments drained by your despair. And no longer cowed by man and his craven destructions, I sit at the foot of your cross, resolutely guarding your ascendency.
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2/5/2016 9:09:44 PM
Helen Murray Posts: 3
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Loved the Title, 'Bathed in the Anguish of Golgotha,' which truly summarised the emotion. 'Impaling me to your cross deeply describes the loyalty given the crucified One. 'No longer cowed by man and his craven destructions' brought me joy. Some beautiful language is here.
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