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11/5/2015 10:37:02 PM
Luann Pfost
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i liked this but the storytelling sequence bothered me the image in my minds eye had you digging with your fingers through ice and earth perhaps a grave i thought but then you fell to all fours? that kind of jarred the puzzle and my mind wandered away from the image into puzzlement about what/how you were digging before you fell it needs more somehow - some image of bent over or reaching down
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