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8/27/2015 11:09:10 AM

Shaan Babu
Posts: 6

Hello,

I'm new to this forum. I'm posting one of my poem for your feedback and comments. I would welcome all the feedback I can get to improve my writing skills.
In this poem, each couplet is an individual couplet and they are not connected to each other.
I would really appreciate any and all the comments I can get.
thanks
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I endured burning all life but did not give light:
If this is life then I didn’t live.

What a cruelty, they talk against me;
Those whom I have never spoken a word.

Whatever I felt like,I had written with sincerity;
These are my prayers not Poetry.

It is just that I’ve had bad luck and then;
Even my candle/lamp refused to lit.

The world seems to tremble with fear from my army;
But I have never competed with you.

The reason I’ve become so lonely;

I have became friends with everyone, no enmity with anyone

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