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6/11/2015 11:59:40 PM
Gabe Shelly Posts: 95
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What do you see when you look at me-- Your eyes say what they feel, But I need to hear what they'd speak my dear-- Your pupils do bite and tear yet... My ears do not listen to the stares they glare-- And I cannot understand these two mighty holes through me Wondering as I fall, "What are you made of my love?"
"Jaffe's Girlfriend" 5/22/'15 edited by Gabe on 6/12/2015 edited by Gabe on 6/12/2015
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6/22/2015 3:59:54 PM
K.M North Posts: 97
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Not bad. I read it a few times to make sure I wasn't missing anything and let it sink in. Stayed with me {always a good sign with anything}. Congrats. I don't really have anything to criticize. Good work-K.M
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