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2/23/2015 8:32:06 PM
Edmund Linton
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Following Dreams by Edmund Linton
wrapped around ceramic dreams
I never knew would show
to afraid to break the mold
of what I’ve come to know
sifting darkness into dust
to find a ray of light
echoes shatter silence
in the middle of this night
i picture memories in my mind
as if these thoughts were true
where once forgotten snapshots
are images of you
standing in the background
is a painting focus clear
a mural lit with sunlight
of what I wish were near
i’ll hold on to this treasure
of what might come to be
in a season not so far away
where I can set it free
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edited by EdmundLinton on 2/23/2015
edited by EdmundLinton on 2/23/2015
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3/2/2015 1:28:20 PM
Graphite Drug
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Dreams of a romantic interest? Meter seems to follow 6-8 syllables and works well with rhyme. This is good poetry, but where is our image? General answer would suggest whoever reader loves. Why does reader need a general poem for that? There needs to be something special about a lover.
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