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2/17/2015 5:38:37 PM
Edmund Linton Posts: 14
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Mystery Solved by Edmund Linton (Draft 1) Some are drawn to mystery, when what we need is clear. The stars - a trillion miles away, and galaxies so near. Ancient writing mixed with flaw distract a curious few, when the meaning we are parsing lies just beneath the view. We reach for heavens and heaven-sent with ever brilliant minds, and never turn our eyes to see the ones we’ve left behind. Distractions lurking everywhere, technology and strife. Perhaps the light we’re longing for is at the center of all life. So when we walk the sea shore and gaze the skies above, remember what we're searching for was prompted by our love.
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2/18/2015 10:56:43 PM
Bob Atkinson Posts: 294
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Bravo Edmund. Something written well, with purpose, of value.
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2/19/2015 8:21:55 AM
Poet Destroyer A Posts: 5
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deep, Edmund. Beautiful imagery, LINDA
-- ~PD~
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2/20/2015 4:01:06 PM
Graphite Drug Posts: 81
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Like a heroic couplet with a contemporary twist, veryreadable and an intellectual joy. Hope to read more. Good work!
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