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12/14/2010 12:31:00 PM
Erica Jane Smith
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I greatly appreciate any feedback... thanks!
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"The Saver"
I was sincere.
And you
kissed my eyes like I was your favorite Lego-
too precious to throw
into the garage sale.
Or a creepy crawler you keep between the mattress
and box spring of your bed
because the
colors of this
worm bring you
closer to God.
Wrap me in
a balloon
and allow the car window to suck me into space-
too fragile for earth
storms and war life.
Or the top drawer where you keep your socks
and underwear, boxer briefs
where I
can nestle softly
in the folds of
your sacred parts.
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12/28/2010 3:48:36 AM
Eiken Laan
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I really like this poem, wonderfully crafted and a very enjoyable read.
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