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11/23/2010 9:14:54 PM Megan Flynn Posts: 2	natural disaster lip trembles an earthquake of a heartbreak she held on so tight but she was blinded by the lies then it all came crashing down bones shiver a blizzard colder than his heart she tried to stay warm but she was frozen in fate’s path then the snow piled higher and higher mouth goes dry a drought sucking up all hope she was always optimistic but she couldn’t take the heat then it all turned to dust eyes flood a rainstorm threatening to drown the fish she kept her head above the water but she got caught in the current then the waves took her under stomach swirls a tornado of emotions she was so strong but she fell for his charm then the wind destroyed it all it’s unavoidable.
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11/23/2010 9:17:40 PM Megan Flynn Posts: 2	never written a real poem in my life, i found this in my diary and thought it was okay. let me know what you think!
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