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10/29/2010 10:47:27 AM Diondra Johnson Posts: 3	at night i'm watchingyou, but you don't know iti see you when you leastexpect iti even know when you'rethinking about mesome people find that hard to believewe have that connectionthat no one knows abouteven though we're far aparti can still feel you're paini know you feel minewe split apart physically but not mentallythat will never happennever in a million yearswe see diferent peoplebut deep down it's justnot the same as it usedto bei thought i hated you butlove it's the completeoppositei see you for who youare inside that's why i'm still in love with youno one could ever replace youi hope that's how you feelfor mei'm curious to know thoughdoes she make you happycan she bring that smileto your face that i couldalways bringi miss what we hadbut i know it can never benow that you're withher will you ever thinkof me -- Always Will Be DJ
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11/15/2010 1:17:13 AM Julie Conerly Posts: 3	There are way too many typo errors and misspelled words to even think about the real message. Try correcting it, maybe give it an old fashion poem look instead of like a paragraph. I see great potential here and I'd love to see what you are really saying. Be sure and proofread your work before you post it.
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