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12/24/2013 3:42:13 PM
Darcy Hazel Morgan Posts: 4
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Tick Tock
Tick Tock, Tick Tock
One second, two seconds
And it
won't
stop
Every minute counts, ever seconds that is passing by I see the time being wasted over nothing, why
Why
Can't I stop the time
Just to rest and to take in my surroundings
To gain confidence and set up a sense of safeness in my mind
As if the future is gonna settle itself down
As if there is something such as a saved future
Tick Tock, Tick Tock
I'm still talking, time's still passing, I'm still crying, time's still laughing
Shoving in my face those seconds I'll never get back
What I could be doing right now instead of writing this down
Building my future up letting my walls down
And it's ticking and it's tocking sweat is trickling down
I could knock down pull down tear down every single clock in this town to the ground
But time won't stop
Tick Tock, Tick Tock
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This is not only the first time I ever post a poem online but also the first time I write one. I've always been fascinated by slam poetry and I've always wanted to try out. Please tell me what you think
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