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11/21/2013 2:05:38 AM
Lily T.
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Razor cuts, deep scars
lemon juice on an artery
confined in a prison
foamed walls and chained ceilings
submerged insanity
voices emit
gleam of illumination
white doves
laughter of children
reached out my hand
took me into the ocean
walking mermaid
spoke of devotion
open heart surgery
a transplant infusion.
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11/21/2013 2:18:44 AM
Kileem Al Lishmiin
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Nice. I'm a sucker for changelings.
The signal of bubbles from under-water 
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