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7/12/2013 1:56:04 PM D.A Hopkins Posts: 15	My mind.... is not my own today I just wish.... 'I' was loved.. T'is my mother who... is full of "shame" A lifetime of lie's... 'were' the pathway, to her demise....as I grew to, become a mum This would open my eye's, to finally realise.... she....has alway's been...the 'unlovable' one I came to know, the purity, inside of... another's "soul" my children, 'forever'... eternally, embedded deep, into my internal subconscious I feel them, even when there, mile's away... it's pure devotion The very thing... my own mother, would 'never' have allowed in... 'this indescribable pleasure' edited by luckychick on 7/12/2013 edited by luckychick on 7/12/2013
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11/9/2013 9:14:29 AM D.A Hopkins Posts: 15	well I have most definately grown since this one!!!! That's a relief
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