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5/9/2013 10:39:17 AM mitchell eadie Posts: 6	Harbouring relationships upon the ocean floor. Beneath the frothing, rolling waves that pound my broken core. Polluted waters sifting pain, tear the hulls apart. Coursing wildly through my veins, leaves just a broken heart.
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5/12/2013 10:47:14 PM Lynn Dolly Posts: 133	Good work!~ i dig
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5/13/2013 11:54:13 AM CHIOMA ONYEKABA Posts: 5	NICE PIECE -- url
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5/14/2013 8:26:12 AM mitchell eadie Posts: 6	Thanks, I'm glad you guys like it .
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5/14/2013 4:44:17 PM Joanne Hayward Posts: 2	I absolutely love this poem! It is just the type of thing that I would recite to myself throughout the day if I had written it to get my painful feelings out of my head so I could cope with them. I think this is a wonderful achievement. Well done!
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