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2/8/2013 12:16:29 PM
Jerome Kidd Posts: 1
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I’ve dreamt of a time, When I could drink clean water, I’ve dreamt of a time, When I could eat clean food, I’ve dreamt of a time, When people would be able to see, That all should be treated equally, I’ve dreamt of a time, Without sorrow, Always telling myself “It will come tomorrow.” I’ve dreamt of a time, Without war, For it fills the shore with bodies of those I adore, I’ve dreamt of a time, When I wasn’t looked at, As just being some black, I’ve dreamt of a time, When I wasn’t looked upon by the ignorant, As being some illegal immigrant, I've Dreamt -Jerome L. Kidd Jr.
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2/10/2013 9:25:59 AM
thelast don Posts: 7
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jkidd223 wrote:
I’ve dreamt of a time, When I could drink clean water, I’ve dreamt of a time, When I could eat clean food, I’ve dreamt of a time, When people would be able to see, That all should be treated equally, I’ve dreamt of a time, Without sorrow, Always telling myself “It will come tomorrow.” I’ve dreamt of a time, Without war, For it fills the shore with bodies of those I adore, I’ve dreamt of a time, When I wasn’t looked at, As just being some black, I’ve dreamt of a time, When I wasn’t looked upon by the ignorant, As being some illegal immigrant, I've Dreamt -Jerome L. Kidd Jr.
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2/10/2013 9:26:13 AM
thelast don Posts: 7
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nice post
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