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12/21/2012 11:59:19 AM
Caitlin Dwinnell
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What lies behind the mirror,
What hides within the clouds,
Who protects my mirror,
Who takes shelter in the crowds,
I protect my mirror,
Hide it from view,
For lying behind your mirror,
Is another side of you,
Some days you’ll be happy,
And others you’ll be sad,
Your eyes will cry your heart will bleed,
But yet you’ll still be glad,
Your loss will fade away,
For you’ll gain something new,
But once you lose yourself,
Then there’s nothing left of you,
With everything I do,
And every sight I’ll see,
I protect my mirror,
Because it shelters me.
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12/31/2012 3:23:35 PM
Evan Thomas
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I liked it. It had a deep meaning- hiding behind a mirror- and felt profound. I especially liked, "For lying behind your mirror, / Is another side of you," because I felt a bit of double meaning in "lying" (physically lying behind and the act of telling a lie). Good work!
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