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11/4/2012 7:12:30 AM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

This day plays over and over in my mind
It'll stay with me until the day I die

On the highway looked up
Dark gray clouds closing in

On the radio Social Distortion comes on
“Reach for the Sky because tomorrowmay never COME..”

Thought to myself, better get therefast
This song might be over in time for herspirit to pass

Still thirty minutes to go
Cars gotta go faster, gotta roll

Reach the hospital and walk fast as Ican
I'd like to run but strangers pass so Icant

I enter the crowded room
I stand in the corner,
I look at her in the bed.
In so much pain, her body is tremblingfrom head to toe

Then IT happened,

She asked for him
He bent down and filled her arms withhis hug
Her upper body slightly off the bed ashe tried to relieve her pain
For the first time in my life I saw mybrother experience true love
I could see the particles of air abovetheir heads exchanging loving thoughts
He thought” It'll be ok, you can letgo”
She thought” It's just so hardbecause I love you sooo”
He thought”I love you baby, god iscalling you home”
She said “ No need to call. I'llwatch over you. When you arrive I'll know”

It was by far the most overwhelmingemotion ever
Beyond control
I could no longer see,
The tears just poured
I think a ghost put it's hand down mythroat,

And then used my heart as a stressrelief ball...

Cancer was the boxer giving my heart abeat

The pain was the ying
as the love was to yang

Two people in love,
In a world that can be so untrue,
I'm so glad my loved one found you!
edited by svlynn18 on 11/4/2012

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