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1/1/2013 10:56:11 AM
Evan Thomas
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Very good! It was very well written. I especially liked the last four lines; they really conveyed that sense of running with the repetition of "I ran," while still showing the tiredness creeping in. And the last line really wrapped it up, and made me feel tired from running (in a good way of course). well done!
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