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10/30/2012 10:47:38 PM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

Swish Swish SwishSwish.
Tripped and almost fell in a ditch!
HEART is P-O-U-N-D-I-N-G
dniheb kooL
STILL have time
Freezing but I can't notice
left right
left right
left right
RunRunRunRunRunRunfasterfasterasterasteraster

with all your might
up the driveway,
there's the car
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boooooooom
“eeeehh yikes”
kabooooom
kicks in the frontdoor
Latch still works,
now it's locked
tttttremmmbbbbbllllinggg

E911on my phone worked,
Car with the blue and red lights finally arrived
Mr.Man in the big white dodge
You'llhave to get my through all this fog..
edited by svlynn18 on 10/30/2012
edited by svlynn18 on 10/30/2012
edited by svlynn18 on 10/30/2012

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