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10/19/2012 12:34:24 AM
Eldaine Lee Posts: 2
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Title: Sun Follows the Moon
There it is again
sun peeping behind the clouds
made for perfection
the crimson rays fade
falling down to horizon
darkness defeats light
colors of twilight
silence in the green meadows
moon enslaves the sun
that's all! thanks!
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10/19/2012 12:35:24 AM
Eldaine Lee Posts: 2
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This is the first time I wrote an haiku and I learned it since yesterday...please give me some corrections, advice...dont worry, I'm an open minded person.
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