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10/15/2012 2:04:59 PM

jamal Abboud
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Suddenlystood she, a sad blind, tightly listening to her mind,
Adroitly,a wind deluded her insight of strides, wide and bright,
Infront of her, quietened, echoes teamed up with swish in swirl,
Unrevealed,I stood fascinated by two pearls steadily whirl in light,
Seekingfor light mingled with bleak black with everlasting blight,
Vividsounds divulge night.

Thenher gentle breath crawled to caress her lips then died,
“Who’sthat?” said she, ‘hides in shelter of my day knight”
Spellbound,I forgot my sageness and manners of fair essence,
MutelyI abode there disappointed with my inner witless fight,
Whileshe, distinctly in fright, inspected silence for her right,
“Whatscheme of voiceless wight?”

Istepped aside, I remember, while she passed in dead time,
Withoutsound, like my tears from their shore, heavy and light,
Undisclosed,in the street, I revised not my expired thoughts,
Sheresembles life, devised to break hearts with breathless might,
Whenit passes, lovely precious choice stands mute and slight,
Justtwo pearls of black and white.

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