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10/15/2012 3:31:19 AM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

There's that moment
When life's no longer about you
You'll give all your love, patience,and honesty
You'll be forced to balance betweenhappy and blue
You'll enjoy playtime when the pillowcalls your name
You'll punish and force it to makedecisions,
Otherwise, you'll only have yourself toblame
Any of your future aspirations mustwork around it's schedule,
The messes you'll need to clean up forthis little devil,
You'll be forced to be the best you canbe
It's going to be smart and take ineverything you see
But it'll all be worth it,
There will always the moments, minutes,hours,
When this sweetness will cuddle andlook you with their big eyes
Speak the most powerful “I love you”
That joyful love will make you cry

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