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Edge of a Dream

On a dark and moonless night she remains concealed 
Smiling as she gazes at his beautiful face
Longing in her heart to succumb to his embrace    
Sensuality from her soul is quietly revealed 

He looks so vulnerable, gazing sleepily 
Watching her every motion as she dances for him 
She sees him shudder … strong desire within 
His eyes reveal that he wants to know her deeply 

He looks at her as if she’s an apparition 
As she reveals herself to him intimately 
He pulls her body to him magnetically 
Completely his, she is open to his passion

In a moonless night, two souls drift away 
Dreams of their ecstasy are fully satisfied 
For a moment they each forget the emptiness inside
Until dreams of the night collide with the day


May 20, 2013


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  1. Date: 5/21/2013 6:36:00 AM

    Is this for the dreams contest?...it should be. It's excellent. And thanks for the heads up on the top poem list. I hadn't seen that before. What makes it a top poem? I wouldn't think it was number of comments because some of mine on there haven't really got THAT many comments...number of faves maybe? I see you have some on there too...course you do. You awesome!
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 5:48:00 PM

    Ah, the slight edits! Nice. Changing the end, does it change the feeling? If only one could do this in real life, the chance for a do-over, would they embrace the new reaction or wish for the original feeling? Attaining a needed wish doesn't always end well. I really like what you did in the end. The veritable reality check colliding with the sunrise. Intensely stated here.
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 5:17:00 PM

    Becca, I see you have mastered the abba rhyme pattern. I love this beautiful accounting of two sharing a dream. BTW, thanks for your comments on "Ballad of Sammy Taylor" It's just one I had to write. It's about a war most people despised. But even despised wars have their heroes... Love ya ... Jake
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 4:27:00 PM

    This would be an ultimate loving dream of glorious passion! You have written a tenderhearted poem, one full of awesome delight! I really loved reading this tremendous piece this evening my friend! I'm in awe of this powerful poem Becca, I truly love this amazing piece, Great Work!!
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 2:47:00 PM

    The captcha said EARS. hahaha. Its ears were burning!!
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 2:46:00 PM

    wow, Becca, I really enjoyed this one. So sensuous. I like how Nette called it wispy thoughts. Because it is so different from the daylight of reality. Was it for Michael's contest or another?
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 12:19:00 PM

    wispy thoughts where dreams abound until reality wakes such reveries.. delicately woven into a mantle of fine verse... best wishes..:) huggs
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 12:11:00 PM

    The 2nd stanza reminds me of the darkened dancing scene in True Lies. Awesome. :) Furthermore, this was a stellar piece. This is a great example/reminder of the whole "too good to be true" perspective. But, something I ponder, is it too good to be true for that moment or for life? This, perhaps, could explain why it's better to live for the moment. Sorry, rambling. Very thought-provoking desires here...

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