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Written In the Sand

WRITTEN IN THE SAND The Big Five—Africa’s pride in the vast open wild Buffalo, Rhinoceros, Elephant, Leopard and Lion Their prey—scattered Impala, Kudu and Waterbuck On hardened dust… their footprints prevail and stand WRITTEN IN THE SAND The proposal day--- carefully planned- a beautiful beach Red Roses, a Picnic, Sunrise and Diamond ring The petals—scattered on the soft damp sea tabloid Lover’s plea….a stick his pen, “Marry me—take my hand” WRITTEN IN THE SAND Early one morning--- He entered the dusty temple to teach Scribes and Pharisees brought her in—an adulterous Large stones…scattered for all to throw and accuse Jesus bent down… wrote with His finger on condemning land What was His message…..? WRITTEN IN THE SAND

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/11/2016 10:50:00 AM

Excellent poem, Kim! Very thought provoking. I love how you interwove the theme of nature, personal, and spiritual into one cohesive piece. Very impressive poetic tapestry. Very, very well done. Must read more of your work. Love and peace.

Patrick Nigros

Date: 5/26/2015 9:37:00 AM

WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.......... WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Theologians can all Marvel at this Writing... WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! loving it Kim.... WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tim Ryerson

Date: 9/8/2014 4:23:00 AM

I know that passage from the Bible...All I remember is that was the incident when He said: 'Let he who is without sin, let him cast the first stone'...Correct? I LOVE your method of using three titles for three wonderful verses! Go directly to my favs, do not pass go...

Tim Ryerson
Date: 9/8/2014 4:24:00 AM

Fav poet too...

Elizabeth Jubenville

Date: 9/27/2013 10:10:00 AM

This is very nice poem Kim, very well done, I really enjoy reading this morning ..... with love.....Ellie

Kim Van Breda
Date: 9/27/2013 12:37:00 PM

Thank you Ellie for stopping by my posts. This poem inspired the title for my second poetry publication.. "Written in the Sand". a collection of Christian poetry.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 8/16/2013 12:17:00 AM

very nicely done Kim ;}

Rosy Love

Date: 8/1/2013 7:52:00 PM

Beautiful and captivating, especially stanza 2, love it! :)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 7/17/2013 11:33:00 PM

Excellent. Outstanding write. Enjoyed. Tfs

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/17/2013 1:16:00 PM

I think that he started writing The Ten Commandmets..We have all broken at least one of them in our lifetime that is if we really soul search..Great work..Unexpected last stanza..Thanks for stopping by..Yes, my cat brings me half eaten squirrel, chipmonk, birds, and field rats..Sara

Kim Van Breda

Date: 7/17/2013 8:36:00 AM

Thanks Tim... you really know your Bible well. I think this is the scripture where He wrote in the sand-- never mentioned what was written. Perhaps same part of the Word that talks about the line in the sand --John 8:6. The second stanza was inspired by the way my son has just recently proposed to his fiancé.. the true romantic !! I must have done something right bringing him up :)

Tim Ryerson

Date: 7/17/2013 8:24:00 AM

'He who is without sin, let him cast the first stone', right?...One of the greatest quotes from Jesus Christ our Saviour and Redeemer...He definitely drew the ultimate 'line in the sand' there didn't he?...LOVE the way you wrote this poem as three separate poems, each with the same title..Gotta say that in my humble opinion, this is your best effort (so far!) - Tim

Poet. Undertaker

Date: 7/17/2013 6:28:00 AM

love love and love. great!

Honestly J.T.

Date: 7/16/2013 8:57:00 PM

I like how you put this one together

Donna Jones

Date: 7/16/2013 5:00:00 PM

Kim your poetry is always as beautiful as you are...and I'm sure the message was one of love...anyway I've always thought so...great message....

Kim Van Breda
Date: 7/17/2013 8:38:00 AM

Thanks Donna-- love your poetry too. :)

Juli- Michelle

Date: 7/16/2013 2:28:00 PM

The last reference is my favorite. I have always wondered what Christ wrote in the ground after the men approached him with the sinful woman. I imagine its something simple and beautiful.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/16/2013 1:37:00 PM

eloquent portrayals of a vow marked in sand... love rules; so beautiful, kim..:) huggs

Kim Van Breda
Date: 7/17/2013 8:37:00 AM

Thank you from a talented poetess as yourself.

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 7/16/2013 10:49:00 AM

Astounding thoughts on sand! The very epitome of creative imagery! I shall add this poem to my faves. ~ I thank you for your very nice comments to my work.

Kim Van Breda
Date: 7/16/2013 12:13:00 PM

Thanks Isaiah-- your input on my Christian based contributions is always appreciated. Your work deems the same response.

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/16/2013 7:59:00 AM

Outstanding perspectives here. It's stunning how one piece of land can contain polar opposites of memories and its impact. Excellent job!

Poet Tacito
Date: 7/16/2013 2:23:00 PM

How exciting!!!!! Congrats to them both!!!!!!! I know you were probably a TAD ecstatic. :)

Kim Van Breda
Date: 7/16/2013 12:15:00 PM

Thanks Drake As always... I value your input. This poem was inspired by John 8 :6 in the Bible along with the way my son proposed to his fiancé last month.