World of a Maze

on cloud nine it seems gravity pulls me back down to the moon’s sunbeams the magnitude forcing a frown there’s a certain purpose for the trial knowing somewhere down the line there’s a real trail but even thinking of trying is a fail a nervous wreck in the midst of space oxygen flows, but it’s out of trace hypnotic doubt overwhelms the soul that sort of mechanical happiness is taking its toll and the fumes of assumptions consume me like the brain is loading its function rhymes a wreck down the railroad of chaos high on sadness the eyes droop some sort of animal-human cross meshed in this never-ending lump of goop philosophic gamma rays pierce the x-ray visions pass—the eyes dull gray disheartened generations gaze in a lightening phase struck eternally in this world of a maze fashion me on high and I swear I will end up down below where the moon-struck sun beats down and says goodbye to the smile of our darkest foe
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 12/9/2013 4:06:00 PM
As I read this wonderful poem I became lost in it, and enjoyed the ride...can I say like body surfing on waves, flowing along, and then being tumbled about, too.
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Date: 10/28/2013 8:35:00 AM
"some sort of animal-human cross meshed in this never-ending lump of goop" What lines Laura. My mind is confounding - could it be more brave. Thank you for your oh so gratifying comment. NOw I know where to find you. love, Kathy
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Date: 10/27/2013 10:36:00 PM
The universe is inside of us. We just need to realize that looking inward is looking outward. It all make sense in a world of chaos. To dream the dream is to love the soul....~Kilmer
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Date: 10/25/2013 11:05:00 AM
Happiness is sometimes just being able to work and receive a paycheck. That is a very big deal, and it pays the bills. The rest is icing on the cake. I am just such a lucky guy :). You have brought a little joy to me this moment. Much thanks!
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Date: 10/25/2013 11:03:00 AM
The universe is a maze and it is also amazing. We are the lucky ones. I just love reading your words. Something really grabs me. The ups and downs of life are tricky. Happiness can take a long time when we are looking for our way. The trail is exciting, however. I am still negotiating my own way.
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Date: 10/25/2013 4:52:00 AM
A nice and wonderful one. Well penned dear one. Kudos! Alwaz, Bob- based on belief
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Date: 10/23/2013 4:09:00 PM
Laura, enjoyed this from all angles. ...love Skat
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Date: 10/23/2013 9:21:00 AM
The flow & emotions in your lines are similiar to a battle of the masses. Tremendous job. "Goodbye to the smile of our darkest foe"...hell yeah.
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Date: 10/23/2013 7:13:00 AM
- Skillfully written Laura - very well done! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/22/2013 10:04:00 PM
yes, Laura, such is the world we live in , Laura
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