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Waiting Room At the Hospital

Pantheon of obtuse glorifications Hallways confetti bile stymied soldiers smile 'Incomiiiiiiiiing!!!!' Waves and waves of the nation's slaves Wave your flag The few The proud The crippled and the dead

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/28/2013 7:05:00 PM

Very strong message here! You've used few words for maximum impact! Thanks for your visits.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/30/2013 5:05:00 PM

Interesting work that you have penned..Sara

Heather Ober

Date: 4/30/2013 9:20:00 AM

Wow! "Waves and waves of the nation's slaves" - well put. You have crafted an intense piece with this one. Great job!

Karen Anglesey

Date: 4/29/2013 3:55:00 PM

Powerful view of the plight of our heros. Well done

Jeremy Martin

Date: 4/28/2013 12:04:00 PM

Another bone-grinding good write.

Jack Jordan

Date: 4/28/2013 9:24:00 AM

There's a lot of intensity packed into these few lines, a condensation of emotion. Well written... Jack

Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 4/26/2013 9:18:00 PM

Very strong, emotional work, Kirin, very sad.

Valerie The Heavy Hearted Poet

Date: 4/24/2013 6:20:00 AM

I really enjoy reading your pieces. You have a talent. This poem was outstanding and strong. Can't wait to read more :)